News Year 2 Birch Writing 23rd January 2018 Deleted User 18 Comments Elis from Birch Class successfully retold the story of ‘The Leopards Drum’ using adjectives and conjunctions.
We really like the adjectives you have used in your story. Your handwriting is also really neat. Well done! Reply
What a lovely piece of work! You must have tried very hard. Your handwriting is very good. How could you use speech marks to make it even better? Reply
Well done Elis! This is very good story writing. We enjoyed your story and wish we could read it every day! Reply
I loved reading your story!! I like all the amazing adjectives and all the sentences! 🙂 Next time make sure you add some inverted commas for speech . I hope my advice helped you in your future story!!:) 🙂 Reply
We really like the adjectives you have used in your story. Your handwriting is also really neat.
Well done!
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I like your hand writeing because it is neat.
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A great re-telling of the story. Well done Elis.
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What a lovely piece of work! You must have tried very hard. Your handwriting is very good.
How could you use speech marks to make it even better?
Thank you.
Well done Elis! This is very good story writing. We enjoyed your story and wish we could read it every day!
Thank you.
I love your work.I could remember when I was in year2.GREAT EFFORT.
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I loved reading your story!! I like all the amazing adjectives and all the sentences! 🙂 Next time make sure you add some inverted commas for speech . I hope my advice helped you in your future story!!:) 🙂
Well Done.Good Work
Thank you.
I like your adjectives and your handwriting.
Very well done on your handwriting. I love it!