What a lovely story – very moving. I’m glad they met their match. I always like a happy ending!
I love the alliteration: ‘sang his song’ and ‘sky, sun and sea’.
Wow Adam this is amazing!! I lava this story!! I wish mine was as good as your lava story with Spark and Wave.I wonder what the story would be like if he didn’t have his song….?
You are so right Karol.Again amazing work to both of you.Adam i loved the way you used a ad same ad near the beginning . Divia I liked how you used a double two A sentence on the second line. I wish my writing was like your ones.I thing that you used nearly a ll the sentences that we have learnt about.These pieces of writing should be in GUINIUS WORLD RECORDS.Adam you should know about it.Divia i’m not very sure if you have it in 4M??
Nice Handwriting Divya! But you could do better with a few better adjectives! adam you also are a really good writer but i think a few more sentance starters (STILL REALLY GOOD )
Well done Dyvia! It’s such a moving story! I really enjoyed the last bit where they finally saw each-other!
Next time you should not use the word hope so much:)
I hope my advice will improve your future story!
🙂 🙂 🙂
Year 3
Year 3 really enjoyed reading your romantic story. We can not wait until we are in year 4 and we can watch the Lava animation and write our own stories. Your writing is very neat.
Nicｅly, I am surprised you all left the very further greatest
one for me.? Daddу stated with a teasing smile. ?Іt?s that he desρatched
Jesus to die f᧐r uѕ and gіve us life eternally and evеr and
that because of that well be a household in heaven for hundreds
of thousands оf years. That?s fairly good isnt it?
Well done Divya and Adam. Such lovely retellings of the story. I wonder how the story would have ended if they didn’t have the song to connect them?
What a lovely story – very moving. I’m glad they met their match. I always like a happy ending!
I love the alliteration: ‘sang his song’ and ‘sky, sun and sea’.
… and Adam, again a lovely re-telling of the story.
I think the way you have used paragraphs really helps with the structure and flow of the story.
Thank you Mr king and Mrs kan for your comments.
Dear Adam,
I really, really liked your story of LAVA .
Next time you could improve the names spark to flame
😉 I just love it!!!!!
FANTASTIC work !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Dear Divya,
I really liked your story 😉
also I liked the adjectives
😉
great work Divya !!!!!!
Two beautiful pieces of writing. Well written with very neat handwriting………..and now I know the story of Lava!!
I completely agree Mrs Kan and Mr King. Two fabulous stories.
I really like your story.
keep up with the goooood work
Mrs Kan and Mr King your so right. Adam and Diva did a very good work and tried hard. They never gave up and they gave their
best.
I agree Elyas
Nice Elyas. I really agree!!!!!!!
This is very impressive work Adam and Divya i like your such neet handwriting
Divya i think your work is really neat
wow Adam and Divya beautiful stories i could of not write a story like that .great handwriting
I agree that it has lovely alliteration and wonderful paragraphs.
This is an amazing story Adam! I wish my Lava story was as good as yours !!
A very good story Adam and I really like handwriting.
l really, really, really like your work!
Great work!
Mrs Kan and Mr King you are so very right. They did their best and tried their hardest.They never gave up and they tried their best.
I think you have done fantastic work keep up with the good work
l really, really, really like your writing!
Amazing handwriting!
I agree with you Heidi!!!!!!!!!!!!
🙂
Wow Adam this is amazing!! I lava this story!! I wish mine was as good as your lava story with Spark and Wave.I wonder what the story would be like if he didn’t have his song….?
Divya i like your ambitious adjectives!
I love the beginning of your story because i liked the song
I love the end when they both had someone to lava and me too just like Mr King i also like happy endings.
Lovely story.
Great work Adam! That was exellent work!
WOW great work from both of you I loved the song as well. keep it up Adam and Divya.
Amazing work. Brilliant handwriting and love how hard you tried.
Totaly agree Chloe.
Amazing work and loved how hard you tried. Brilliant work.
Love your writing OMG
Adam yours just fantastic and I agree with mr king and mrs kan
Divya welldone tooo
KEEP UP WITH THE GOOD WORK
Amazing work big Bro
Well done! both of you
Brilliant writing! I really enjoyed it
I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!
I absolutely adore it . Next time you could change the name from spark to Lava.
Good Divia…YOU took a long time doing that didn’t you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I really really really really like it
You are so right Karol.Again amazing work to both of you.Adam i loved the way you used a ad same ad near the beginning . Divia I liked how you used a double two A sentence on the second line. I wish my writing was like your ones.I thing that you used nearly a ll the sentences that we have learnt about.These pieces of writing should be in GUINIUS WORLD RECORDS.Adam you should know about it.Divia i’m not very sure if you have it in 4M??
Nice Handwriting Divya! But you could do better with a few better adjectives! adam you also are a really good writer but i think a few more sentance starters (STILL REALLY GOOD )
Yes Divya is in 4M aswell as me adi!
Well done Dyvia! It’s such a moving story! I really enjoyed the last bit where they finally saw each-other!
Next time you should not use the word hope so much:)
I hope my advice will improve your future story!
🙂 🙂 🙂
Maybe try and make your capital letters stand out better
good work
seren :]
Wow ! what a interesting story.I really like the vocabulary you used.I cant wait to read another of your story’s!
Well done to all of you!I wonder what would happen if the volcano never sang his great song?It would be very interesting if you made a lava 2.
I really enjoyed reading your intresting stories. Keep it up!WELL DONE!
Excellent story Dyvia!!I also enjoyed all the adjectives and high vocabulary. Next time try not to repeat your words so much. 🙂 🙂
Year 3
Year 3 really enjoyed reading your romantic story. We can not wait until we are in year 4 and we can watch the Lava animation and write our own stories. Your writing is very neat.
I can not wait to retell Lava and watch the animation.
Very neat handwriting
Love your handwriting and presentation.
Great handwriting and a amazing story.
BE PROUD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nicｅly, I am surprised you all left the very further greatest
one for me.? Daddу stated with a teasing smile. ?Іt?s that he desρatched
Jesus to die f᧐r uѕ and gіve us life eternally and evеr and
that because of that well be a household in heaven for hundreds
of thousands оf years. That?s fairly good isnt it?